creative writing story about sailing across the sea

Hello, Ive been working on a story about me sailing across the sea. I really have fun learning about pacific navigation  and the story about the man who sailed the sea. Next time we could maybe look at more details of the pacific navigation. I really enjoyed doing this task and I had fun trying to come up with  ideas for this story. my favourite part of writing this story was when Miss Whea  Reawyn was away and we had Mr Scout as our reliever Mr Scout told me to put sharks in the story so I did and now the story is weird.

here is my story 

 ~ Once upon a sea amazing ride ~
By Shanaya
As the waka smashes against the tall thick waves, the sea gets

rougher and stronger all you could hear was the roaring sound

of waves.  Me, Casey Smith with my friend Stella Coles

will sail

across the pacific ocean  without fail or doubt. I will succeed at my

task and do the best I can. As the night breeze ends the moon falls

and the sun rises I can smell the stench of seaweed. I thought “ well

at least there are no more roaring waves” I go and get a drink of water

and all I could taste was over salted beef  elgk. I continue to

sail across

the ocean with an empty stomach. I go to eat some fruit just as

someone shouted “ Ika I caught an Ika” I ran to the front of the

waka not thinking about the lightning that rumbles above us.

Before I could think I was standing before stella holding an Ika ,

she turned around to look at me with a smile on my face. After

eating some fruit we looked to see nothing but a night sky filled

with fog. Me and Stella wait for the fog to go way. Once the fog

distergreated into thin air we start to move again to be right in

front of Rapanui, a beautiful island with face stone carvings. We

land on the beach next to some rocks,we jumped off the waka

to be greeted by a beautiful song and dance. After a few days we

were back gliding  across the sea with a beautiful  baby blue sky. I

has a sudden glance of something out the corner of my eye. I saw

a shark and I look around the waka to see a group of sharks circling

the waka. There black eyes stared like a seagull wanting food, it sent

shivers down  my spine I turn around at the sound of a girl screaming

“help help" I sprint to save stella (she's the only person on the waka

with me) I jump on top of the shark and stabbed it in the eye It dropped

  Stella and I fell off  the shark swam away. Me and Stella swam back

to the waka and jumped back in. after sailing for a few days we started

to get exhausted and drained. (time skip) Now we are on our last day

and not far from our home. It was a burning hot bright day out in

the sun as we get a good picture of our home. The blue sky highlighted

the best part of the Island, we land on the soft light sand with a nice

welcome song and hug. It feels great to be back at home. As I run

towards my brother and mother I could see the tears in their eyes. I

give them a big hug and have a family feast. We laughed and

played

games, and have a boom fire. We stayed up late having fun It felt great.

After 99 days of sailing the sea it feels amazing to be back from a

unforgettable trip, a story to tell for years to come and a journey that

I will never forget. The waiata I heard during the journey that have been

shared through the generations shared the love of culture and the

meaning of life, the stories people have to tell have took place in my

own personal story I will cherish this trip for the rest of my days.

Thank you for the fun …. Life. 

The End 

Hope you enjoyed.